Brainstorm - what do you want to change?

This is our brainstorming part of our persuasive writing. We had to think of things we wanted to change at home, at school, in our class, in the community and in the world. This is what I came up with.

use tenths

The coolest camp ever

Camp was amazing, there was air rifling and a flying fox. It  was scary at first but at the end of the day it was not that scary. There was paint ball guns which I did not go and do .There was a train called railway jiggers. It was fun at first but when you want to go 2 more time you will never want to go again. There are go carts that were cool to drive and you can do drives and it was so cool.

my holday

Bithday was no the ?? of Ap it was fun and I am 12 naw it is to god to be truy we went to the shop and we went to go swimming in the sea. My mom and I went to the hostel to jek the baby ef the baby was orit and went the shops

1.Focus fully on the speaker
2.Avoid interrupting
3.Avoid seeming judgemental
4.Show your interest

week 8